L.O. To revise the importance of a varied prose style
In class, we've often talked about trying to fit in all our sentence types and forms of punctuation in the opening 6-7 lines of our stories:
Fragments
Impact sentences
Simple sentences
Compound sentences
Bracket
Dash
Semi-colon
Colon
Homework: The first six-seven lines of a short story entitled 'Down on the Farm'. Include all of the punctuation above! Then come onto the blog and type your work up in the comments section! Remember, only write six-seven lines!
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Down in the farm.
I felt like I'd been kicked in the stommach.
"Father it's not true, father you still have you job!" I asked.
"It's true", he mouthed but no words came out.
We were making little money as it was but now no money. I shuddered.
There was not a single word or complement any one could make now it was too late we'd have to sell the house.
i wept into my apron, crestfallen.
English Homework
"Hurry up Charlie!"grunted farmer Amos.He sighed.'Lazy'. A strand of of snot escaped from his nose, and produced a translusent sliver on his jacket lapel. He wipe it away with back of his hand.
"Coming Uncle Amos!"replied
Charlie, scooping up the bucket of slop,and scuttling over to Amos.
"Where have you been?" asked Amos, snatching the bucket. Unfortunatley, the bucket dropped, spilling it's contents onto the ground; not bothering, he strutted off (hoping the pigs would hoover it up for him).Amos just slumped onto a bail of hay.
Charlie thought, his uncle was the lazy one:he always made others do the work for him!Life down on the farm was hard-really hard!
from 'j'
Down in the Farm.
"No! Get away from my sheep!" the farmer cried.
Suddenly,the van containing all the farmer's sheep, including the three-year old babies, drove down the path. A huge cloud of dust billowed behind it,and made it impossible for the farmer to see which way the truck had gone.(there was a crossroad)
The farmer sighed.
For continuous hours he had slaved for the sheep:he loved them. Now the fair had come;and no prize to be one.A bead of sweat trickled in the blazing afternoon.
English homework
Down in the farm
"Get on with ya, and don't forget to do the chores!!" barked Farmer Brook to his son, Daniel. Daniel was feeling lazy; but his dad was angry, and irratated. As soon as Daniel was about to moan- he shut his mouth: he didn't want there to be another argument (as his dad always won). Farmer Brook was angry: Daniel was late for milking the cows. Daniel pulled on a t- shirt and stepped into the crispy morning.
"Down in the farm" He thought sighing. Why was he always told of for small little matters?
Farmer Giles looked out over his fields of sheep. He was annoyed, the sheep dog was missing; gone, vanished.
"Dog!" he bellowed (he was a shouty sort of man.) The dog trotted up.
"Chasing rabbits?" The dog sniffed: miffed. Farmer Giles turned for home - a had a way to go. He tripped. His foot was in a rabbit hole, maybe I should let him chase them after all, he thought. toffee
TT said:
Down on the farm.
"Help-Help," cried the farmer in dismay as the pigs bared their sharp, pointed and develish teeth. The devil, but a pig; the devil disguised, cunningly, as a pig.
"I hate pigs," screeched the farmer. The farmer ran as fast as he could, but that was not fast enough. The vampire pigs were upon him and he was being slowly drained of blood!
English homework:
I didn't think they were going to make it. Th poor little calfs(which would refuse to eat and drink)were hardly a week old and already they weren't improving.
Then it happened.
The family had a shock they would never forget, even if they died, because today was the day we would lose everything.
"It is only somthing spooky,"puffed old farmmer Joe
"Oh yes!"screeched Hermione(the farmer's wife)in full fear. The barn shook.
There was defeiatly somthing in the barn which was dull and unhappy. The barn walls were bathed in cobwebs that had not been dusted for centurys. Not many people would go in there because god know what thing could sneak into the barn. A creature sneaked behind Joe.
"Joe I have really got to go, really got to."
"Okay,"whispered farmer Joe in dismay; he had no clue what he was ever he was saying.Joe always had a piece of straw in his mouth. Not for long because he was going to die any moment now.
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