Year 6 Flat World Stories & School Magazine Work - Writing a Second Draft

In class we looked at giving positive, constructive feedback using the 'elbow' and PQP methods. Using the feedback you received on your first attempt, I want you to write a second draft of your story.

Don't forget you can revise the key description and characterisation techniques that should be at the heart of any story you write at Bald Worm.

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Year 5: Second Draft of 'Escape' Story (Weekend)

We've been writing and redrafting our P.O.W. World War II 'Escape'. Your homework is in two parts:

PART A
Either:

1. Type up your improved story and email it to me at baldworm@baldworm.co.uk (do not print it!)

or, if you really must...

2. Write it up in pen in your neatest handwriting on A4 paper.

Either way, make sure that you improve it as you write, because writing is rewriting!

Next week we'll record extracts from these stories as podcasts!

PART B
Next week you'll begin writing book reviews that will be posted at Books Go Global! This will be the first Year 5 flatclassroom project, where you'll share your work with children on the other side of the world!

Please select a favourite book, and bring it in to school on Wednesday, ready to write a brilliant book review!

Due: Monday

Year 6 - 'The Paper Round' redraft

Please redraft your 'Paper Round' story, making sure you (i) set the scene and (ii) include lots of commas!

Revise setting the scene - and redrafting - at baldworm.co.uk!

Year 5 - Redrafting our Secret HQ descriptions

In class you began to type up your description of the secret hq on your page in our pupil wiki. Your homework is to complete writing it up.

Remember that this is a great opportunity to improve your writing as you go - and do try to use all of Bald Worm's descriptive techniques!

Feeling clever? Don't forget to try to throw in some impact sentences to 'balance' your prose!