Year Five: The Great Escape

Please complete your first draft of your 'Great Escape' story, using plenty of dialogue and shown feelings, please:


P.S. Don't forget we're recording the Comma Song next week.

Year 5 Fiction: Comic Writing- Puncturing Pomposity

L.O. To revise the use of shown feelings in a dialogue

One of the key rules of comedy is to puncture pomposity. There is little funnier than a pompous person being made to look silly:



We love to see the pompous get their comeuppance!

Task: In class, we used role play to act like a 'pompous twit'. Write a dialogue - using lots of shown feelings - where a pompous person is being pompous in a cafe, e.g.

"Waiter! Waiter!" bellowed Sir Reginald Pullover, tapping his folk and knife against his plate. "Waiter!"

"Could you keep your voice down, dear," whispered Lady Pullover.

Sir Reginald's cheeks turned even more purple: "We have been sat in this cafe for over thirty seconds and we still have not been served!"

Write 1/2 side of A4. Don't forget to vary your dialogue and include plenty of those oh-so-important shown feelings.

Feeling clever? Include the 'Messi Wiggle' (embedded subordinate clauses)

Due: Friday

(Image by Ben Sutherland; used under Creative Commons agreement)

Year 5: Varying the Presentation of Direct Speech

//L.O. To understand the benefits of varying the presentation of direct speech//

In class we looked at presenting direct speech by beginning with the name + speech tag/shown feelin, e.g.

Bob started to shake. "A-re you a monster?"


Write a dialogue between a mad professor and his creature, where the professor is trying to teach his new creature, varying your presentation of direct speech. Don't forget to include lots of shown feelings!

Due: Thursday

Year 6 Noir Fiction - Femme Fatale

L.O. To include complex sentences in a dialogue

Last night we revised the use of complex sentences.

Write a dialogue (1/2 page) between a innocent man and a dangerous femme fatale, where the femme fatale wants to con the man into giving her something she wants - like his wallet!

Try to include complex sentences in your dialogue, e.g.

"Look, doll face, do I look like a rat?" (I've 'bracketed off' doll face)

Feeling clever? Don't forget to present your dialogue in different ways.

Year 6 (Wednesday) Distinctive Dickensian Dialogue

L.O. To write a dialogue using distinctive dialogue

Imagine Mr Pickwick and Mr Jingles are travelling in a cab with a 'wery vude' cabman. Write a dialogue about their discussion - using distinctive speech for Mr Jingles and the cabman. Write 3/4 side of A4.

Learn more about distinctive voices here.

Learn more about our Dickens work and characterisation here.

Due: Thursday.

Year 5 'Show, Don't Tell'

L.O. To revise the difference between an author ‘telling’ and ‘showing’

Please complete the Montmorency Doctor Farcett 'show, don't tell' task. Remember to study the advice at baldworm, here, before you begin!

Year 3 Fiction - 'Shark!'

To revise combining passage of description that 'sets the scene' with dialogue.

Your homework is to write 1/2 side of A4 entitled 'Shark!'. Two children - you and a friend - are at the beach.

* Spend 7-8 lines using the five senses, colours and similes to 'set the scene'

* Then use indented direct speech as your characters discuss the shark swimming towards you, like this:

"What is it?" I asked.
"I don't know," replied Alice. "But it sure is coming this way!"

Feeling clever? Click here to learn about how shown feelings can bring your stories to life.

Year 3 Creative Writing - Including Shown Feelings

L.O. To understand the need to include feelings if one wishes the reader to care about the characters in our stories

In class we looked at how important it is to include 'shown feelings' in a story. You can learn more about shown feelings by clicking here.

Watch this video to remind yourself how to include feelings in your stories:



Homework: Imagine you are asleep, when a Wicked Witch jumps out from under your bed!What would you say to her? What does she want? Write a short dialogue about what you'd say to the Wicked Witch - and remember to include lots of feelings.

Year 3 Creative Writing - Reviewing Dialogues

1. Watch this video to revise the layout of direct speech in a dialogue.



2. Write a short dialogue (between 1/2 side and 3/4 side of A4, please), based on the following picture - it will help if you imagine the dog can talk!



You may want to begin your dialogue like this:

"Bye, darling, I'm off for a run!" shouted Bob. He had a silly grin plastered all over his face. Bob's daily run was his favourite part of the day.
"Hello, waht's this?" muttered next-door's dog. Saliva began to drop from his whiskery chin.

Feeling clever? Try to include some shown feelings. Learn all about feelings by clicking here.